Warning
When I am an old woman I shall wear purple
With a red hat which doesn't go, and doesn't suit me.
And I shall spend my pension on brandy and summer gloves
And satin sandlas, and say we've no money for butter.
I shall sit down on the pavement when I'm tired
And gobble up samples in shops and press alarm bells
And run my stick along the public railings
And make up for the sobriety of my youth.
I shall go out in my slippers in the rain
And pick flowers in other people's gardens
And learn to spit.
You can wear terrible shirts and grow more fat
And eat three pounds of sausages at a go
Or only bread and pickle for a week
And hoard pens and pencils and beermats and things in boxes.
But now we must have clothes that keep us dry
And pay our rent and not swear in the street
And set a good example for the children.
We must have friends to dinner and read the papers.
But maybe I ought to practice a little now?
So people who know me are not too shocked and surprised
When suddenly I am old, and start to wear purple.
Jenny Joseph
Can somebody help me to analise this poem....?
what kind of things are you looking to analyze? theme, literary devices...?
Tuesday, February 14, 2012
I just had to break of with a man?
You see, he wants me and his wife too. He is separated and living in his own apartment as a single man. He wants a relationship with me and his wife is abusive too him. He served her papers and she wont sign them. She really wants nothing to do with him unless someone else takes an interest in him. He's a great guy as far as personnality and never abusive in anyway. Very kindhearted. But he wont proseed with his divorce. I love this man, but he needs to choose. I told him that and he tells me that I am putting to much pressure on him, he tells me to wait and it will eventually happen. I am an idiot. He really has become relaxed in having his cake and eating it to , if you know what I mean. He refuses to take me out and except one time and has never bought me flowers. So yesterday I told him it's been too long and I want to move on with my life. I am 41, single. no other men in my life, I have been told I am pretty and I deserve better. NO MORE!
I just had to break of with a man?
So is there a question here?
Reply:thats good...just stick to your guns....say what you mean and mean what you say. the only thing a bad man can do is stand in the way of a good one. get that loser out of your life.
Reply:Right on. You're doing the right thing.
Reply:ok....
Reply:Does he have kids ? if so, that may be the reason for him sticking around with the Ex or at least having to have a relationship with her. As for the guy, it's to hard to figure out what's going through his head. But from a guy in a similar situation, all I have is heart to give and if no-ones there to take it it difficult to do anything. He sounds like he picked the girl and is living with the mistake. I bet he cares for you deeply and needs to go through the ropes to get where he needs to be. I won't shut him out, give him time. If you like him, give some time and a chance to develop over time. As for the taking out on date thing, you got me ???? and on the flowers
If he's so kindhearted , where's the flowers ???? He needs to be thinking of you and may not be ..
Reply:Date someone else
Reply:Oh, please...
Grow up.
Reply:no matter how hard i try i will never understand women like you all i read was WAAAAA, WAAAAA, WAAAAAA you really need help!!!
Reply:you did the right thing good for you!!!!!
Reply:well,i guess you did right!!its better to move on with life instead waiting for someone who cant give you a status in society and expects you to be hanging around for his fancies to be satisfied!!
Reply:There is no pic of you on your 360.
Reply:GOOD FOR YOU!!! Let him deal with his problems. If he loses you, it's his lose. He is dealing with something that shouldn't involve you. I'm glad you are finally making the right decision to leave.
Reply:Yeah, you're an idiot.
Reply:it's really hard to break things off when you dont have anyone else to fill the gap...why dont you try weaning yourself from him?
try to find some other friends or join a club where people have some of the same interests you do so that you can eventually get away from him... i understand that he is a great guy but if he is ever "yours" you will always have that nagging doubt in the back of your head...if he did it to her, he might do it to me....i know from experience.......being alone is hard but being used is harder to get over
Reply:First of all your choice , I am sorry to say is not appropriate.A married man or woman should be morally responsible towards each other.You should not have disturbed them.Find a partner who is free from such responsibilities.You are making him put his both legs in two different boats and sail.What will happen he will fall into the water.
This reminds me of a story of a middle aged person with an aged wife and another young wife.The aged one plucked his black hairs and the younger one , got rid of his white ones,thus making him totally bald.
Contemplate on freeing yourself from this vicious triangle.
Reply:Move on and find some other GOOD guys to date. He is not going to leave his wife to marry you and if he does it will be never ending drama with her because if she is mad only when he is seeing someone she sounds psycho.
Reply:Good for you. You go girl.
Reply:so you just answered your own question didnt you?
Reply:I think you just answer yourself!!!
But if what you wanted was someone to agree with you.... I am the one...
You go girl!!!!
Reply:wheres the question
I just had to break of with a man?
So is there a question here?
Reply:thats good...just stick to your guns....say what you mean and mean what you say. the only thing a bad man can do is stand in the way of a good one. get that loser out of your life.
Reply:Right on. You're doing the right thing.
Reply:ok....
Reply:Does he have kids ? if so, that may be the reason for him sticking around with the Ex or at least having to have a relationship with her. As for the guy, it's to hard to figure out what's going through his head. But from a guy in a similar situation, all I have is heart to give and if no-ones there to take it it difficult to do anything. He sounds like he picked the girl and is living with the mistake. I bet he cares for you deeply and needs to go through the ropes to get where he needs to be. I won't shut him out, give him time. If you like him, give some time and a chance to develop over time. As for the taking out on date thing, you got me ???? and on the flowers
If he's so kindhearted , where's the flowers ???? He needs to be thinking of you and may not be ..
Reply:Date someone else
Reply:Oh, please...
Grow up.
Reply:no matter how hard i try i will never understand women like you all i read was WAAAAA, WAAAAA, WAAAAAA you really need help!!!
Reply:you did the right thing good for you!!!!!
Reply:well,i guess you did right!!its better to move on with life instead waiting for someone who cant give you a status in society and expects you to be hanging around for his fancies to be satisfied!!
Reply:There is no pic of you on your 360.
Reply:GOOD FOR YOU!!! Let him deal with his problems. If he loses you, it's his lose. He is dealing with something that shouldn't involve you. I'm glad you are finally making the right decision to leave.
Reply:Yeah, you're an idiot.
Reply:it's really hard to break things off when you dont have anyone else to fill the gap...why dont you try weaning yourself from him?
try to find some other friends or join a club where people have some of the same interests you do so that you can eventually get away from him... i understand that he is a great guy but if he is ever "yours" you will always have that nagging doubt in the back of your head...if he did it to her, he might do it to me....i know from experience.......being alone is hard but being used is harder to get over
Reply:First of all your choice , I am sorry to say is not appropriate.A married man or woman should be morally responsible towards each other.You should not have disturbed them.Find a partner who is free from such responsibilities.You are making him put his both legs in two different boats and sail.What will happen he will fall into the water.
This reminds me of a story of a middle aged person with an aged wife and another young wife.The aged one plucked his black hairs and the younger one , got rid of his white ones,thus making him totally bald.
Contemplate on freeing yourself from this vicious triangle.
Reply:Move on and find some other GOOD guys to date. He is not going to leave his wife to marry you and if he does it will be never ending drama with her because if she is mad only when he is seeing someone she sounds psycho.
Reply:Good for you. You go girl.
Reply:so you just answered your own question didnt you?
Reply:I think you just answer yourself!!!
But if what you wanted was someone to agree with you.... I am the one...
You go girl!!!!
Reply:wheres the question
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Is my soon to be ex in love or on the rebound?
My ex and I split in May but spent most of the year spending time together. Around December, we decided to go ahead and divorce and filed papers. Not long after she asked me if I was dating and I told her yes. She seemed a little hurt. Our anniversary came at the end of the month and I sent flowers. We went to lunch and she started telling me about the new guy she was dating, and asking me about my dates. The last couple of weeks she is telling me this guy is the love of her life and were done. I've told her I still love her and am willing to fight for our marriage. Her friends feel she is fooling herself. I sent her an email telling her I am moving on but thanking her for showing me the changes I need to make to be better next time. She returned an email saying she is glad I am willing to change then describing how this guy loves her better than me, then turning angry saying she doesnt care what I change. Sound like a rebound to me and she still has feelings. Any thoughts?
Is my soon to be ex in love or on the rebound?
She still cares, HOWEVER, she wants to have her cake and eat it too. She sees characteristics in this other guy that she feels maybe make up for some of your shortcomings. Also, the first stages of a relationship is more exciting and causes more hormones and feelings to arise than an established relationship, so maybe she just likes that initial, new "in love" feeling. You're going to have to move on though.
Reply:In my opinion, you all should leave each other in the past. Going out to dinner, discussing who you all are dating, sending emails and you sending flowers should not have happened. Apparently, you all could not do these things during the marriage, so there's no need to start doing these things now. By doing these things, you both seems to be trying to hold on to something that's no longer there. Do you all have children? If so, then the only concern you all should have is the welfare of the child(ren). I find it childish that she tells you who she is dating and what the current boyfriend is doing for her. It is hard for me to say she is on the rebound because she may or may not. She may very well love this man (who knows other than her).
My thoughts are leave the past in the past. Since she is a part of your past then leave her there. Literally MOVE ON with your life. If you have to change your email address, phone number etc. than do so. Give yourself time to heal from the divorce before you get involved with someone else for you will find yourself "being on the rebound" as well. Don't look back at her and disassociate yourself with her personal life (who she's dating etc.) and don't let her into your business. I wish you well.
Reply:Maybe you should of tried to fix the marriage before filing for divorce. You had no problem when you went on dating, mmm doesnt seem like youve thought anything out. Shes saying this guy makes her happy and she loves him why not believe what shes saying? Is she a teenager playing games or a grown women? Move on with dating like you already did.
Reply:Umm...you filed for divorce, signed the divorce papers. You obviously didn't want this to end and she definitely clung on to the first guy that paid attention to her to spite you.
...but move on. So what if she is making a mistake?! Remember the reasons as to why you were divorcing in the first place...
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Is my soon to be ex in love or on the rebound?
She still cares, HOWEVER, she wants to have her cake and eat it too. She sees characteristics in this other guy that she feels maybe make up for some of your shortcomings. Also, the first stages of a relationship is more exciting and causes more hormones and feelings to arise than an established relationship, so maybe she just likes that initial, new "in love" feeling. You're going to have to move on though.
Reply:In my opinion, you all should leave each other in the past. Going out to dinner, discussing who you all are dating, sending emails and you sending flowers should not have happened. Apparently, you all could not do these things during the marriage, so there's no need to start doing these things now. By doing these things, you both seems to be trying to hold on to something that's no longer there. Do you all have children? If so, then the only concern you all should have is the welfare of the child(ren). I find it childish that she tells you who she is dating and what the current boyfriend is doing for her. It is hard for me to say she is on the rebound because she may or may not. She may very well love this man (who knows other than her).
My thoughts are leave the past in the past. Since she is a part of your past then leave her there. Literally MOVE ON with your life. If you have to change your email address, phone number etc. than do so. Give yourself time to heal from the divorce before you get involved with someone else for you will find yourself "being on the rebound" as well. Don't look back at her and disassociate yourself with her personal life (who she's dating etc.) and don't let her into your business. I wish you well.
Reply:Maybe you should of tried to fix the marriage before filing for divorce. You had no problem when you went on dating, mmm doesnt seem like youve thought anything out. Shes saying this guy makes her happy and she loves him why not believe what shes saying? Is she a teenager playing games or a grown women? Move on with dating like you already did.
Reply:Umm...you filed for divorce, signed the divorce papers. You obviously didn't want this to end and she definitely clung on to the first guy that paid attention to her to spite you.
...but move on. So what if she is making a mistake?! Remember the reasons as to why you were divorcing in the first place...
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Is she my ex on the rebound?
My ex and I split in May but spent most of the year spending time together. Around December, we decided to go ahead and divorce and filed papers. Not long after she asked me if I was dating and I told her yes (though I wasnt). She seemed a little hurt. Our anniversary came at the end of the month and I sent flowers. We went to lunch and she started telling me about the new guy she was dating, and asking me about my dates. The last couple of weeks she is telling me this guy is the love of her life and were done. I've told her I still love her and am willing to fight for our marriage. Her friends feel she is fooling herself. I sent her an email telling her I am moving on but thanking her for showing me the changes I need to make to be better next time. She returned an email saying first she is glad I am willing to change, then how this guy loves her better than me, finally turning angry saying she doesnt care what I change. Sounds like a rebound to me and she is still hurt. Any thoughts
Is she my ex on the rebound?
sounds like she just went out and found someone because you lied to her and said you were. like she had to prove that she too is moving on. i doubt her relationship is anywhere as serious as she says it is or that she thinks it will be. she is very hurt by what you said. she has to prove she is better than you, that she can do better without you, and that she doesn't need you in her life. that is what she is doing.
Reply:Ok, I only had to read the first half of the paragraph to know that she's mean for even telling you about some other guy being the love of her life. 6 years later and my divorce still hurts. that's something you'll always have. Try to leave her out of your life for a while so you can heal and move on, then try being friends.
Reply:Both of you need to stop playing games! You're getting divorced now, so go through with it. She IS on the rebound, yes, but that is not your responsiblity, nor your concern. She wouldn't listen anyway. Move on in your own life, and let her live hers.
Reply:she is your ex, move on already and leave her be
Reply:you're the one hurt. get over her.. you learned how to be better that's all you can expect anymore so if you are going in with that in mind you are so much more better off as you come out right? OK then now that we are on the same page a rebound love is one who fills the void of being without right then within hours or days not almost a year she had plenty of time to work the audience (so to speak) she probably knows what she is doing more so than you? Try and let her go as soon as you can you will thank her for the clarity she gave your being and now you can move forward to find that one who truly is there waiting for you to be found...
Reply:Yeah probably, but does it matter? For you, I mean.
Reply:yes
Is she my ex on the rebound?
sounds like she just went out and found someone because you lied to her and said you were. like she had to prove that she too is moving on. i doubt her relationship is anywhere as serious as she says it is or that she thinks it will be. she is very hurt by what you said. she has to prove she is better than you, that she can do better without you, and that she doesn't need you in her life. that is what she is doing.
Reply:Ok, I only had to read the first half of the paragraph to know that she's mean for even telling you about some other guy being the love of her life. 6 years later and my divorce still hurts. that's something you'll always have. Try to leave her out of your life for a while so you can heal and move on, then try being friends.
Reply:Both of you need to stop playing games! You're getting divorced now, so go through with it. She IS on the rebound, yes, but that is not your responsiblity, nor your concern. She wouldn't listen anyway. Move on in your own life, and let her live hers.
Reply:she is your ex, move on already and leave her be
Reply:you're the one hurt. get over her.. you learned how to be better that's all you can expect anymore so if you are going in with that in mind you are so much more better off as you come out right? OK then now that we are on the same page a rebound love is one who fills the void of being without right then within hours or days not almost a year she had plenty of time to work the audience (so to speak) she probably knows what she is doing more so than you? Try and let her go as soon as you can you will thank her for the clarity she gave your being and now you can move forward to find that one who truly is there waiting for you to be found...
Reply:Yeah probably, but does it matter? For you, I mean.
Reply:yes
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How is this story?
Chapter 1
This was a night to remember. As usual when everyone was asleep I went outside for a walk. Creek! The wooden door needs a lot of fixing! But Dad doesn’t do anything about it! I’m just lucky enough that nobody knows I was going out. I go out for a stroll in the park and sit on the swings and just ponder. I was wondering what my real mother must be doing right now. Let me tell you everything from the beginning. I was born in Colorado. My mom and dad loved me very much. They had named me Kelly Del but one dark night, my dad got into an accident during a storm. I was only three then and it was hard for my mom to get out of this shock. So when I was about six years old my mom decided to put me into an orphanage home. She told me she was going away for a tour at work and she would come back to get me the very next day. But she never came back… I always thought that the reason she didn’t come back was because she wasn’t able to give me a normal living. But still I waited each and everyday, when their came one day, after almost one year later, that I was told I was going into a foster home. I was horrified. The family seemed nice…but then again…what better do I know? Mrs. Felon, who had been taking care of me for a year, took me into a bright room. There was Mr. Sheldon on the other side of the table, a man who was wearing a bright yellow shirt and jeans, a woman who was wearing a dark blue shirt with a brown scarf, and a girl wearing a flowered shirt and skirt who seemed almost my age. Mr. Sheldon told me to take a seat next to the woman. I sat down and Mrs. Felon sat next to me. They told me I had no other choice other then agreeing to live with the new family. But still they asked me if it was okay with me or not…I thought about what to say…I was really confused. If I didn’t have a choice then why were they making it seem like there was…I said to him “Well since you have already made the decision, what else can I say?” He said “Okay.” They all talked with each other. The man across the table told the family some information about me. Like, I was 7 years old; I’ve been living here for almost a year, my dad died when I was three and etc. The man and woman told the man “We don’t want to know anything more about her past other than her behavior. I mean, is she quiet, shy, mean, excited, etc.” The man said, “Well there is much to say about her…she is very quiet, but not shy, she is absolutely not mean! There hasn’t been anything that has lead her to become excited so I don’t think there is much to say about that. But she has been a pleasure to have around here.” He gave me a quick smile. I hadn’t ever seen him in my life. Than how did he know so much about me? I was getting a bit nervous, but then I thought that well, Mrs. Felon or someone else told him that. Than the women said, “Okay, we have made our decision! We have decided to take her into our home!” Everyone became very excited. Especially the girl! She said to the women, “Mommy! Mommy! Is she my new sister? Mommy!!?? Answer me! Is she my new sister?” Her mother said “Yes, Sammy! What do you want to name her? Do you want to name her Natalie?” I cried out “WHAT? You can’t change my name!! Mrs. Felon!! They can’t change my name right?” Mrs. Felon gave the man a look. She said “Well since you do belong to them now they can change your name!” The woman said “Honey, its okay. If you don’t want to change your name, than it’s fine with me! Now let me introduce us to you. I’m Sandy Howard, and I’m your new mother! This is my husband, you’re new father, Joey Howard, and this is Samantha Howard, your new sister.” I said sadly, “I have to change my last name?” Sandy said “Yes, you are our new daughter which means your part of our family! So now your name is Kelly Howard…now doesn’t that sound great?” I thought about it for a while. I do have to live with them now. Which means I will have to compromise something’s, even if it my name. “Okay Sandy, if that’s what you wish.” Sandy said, “Honey, you can call me mom! After all I am your mom now, right?” I said to her in a low voice “Okay, mom.” I never in my life had thought I would have to see a day like this one. How could I have let these people take the place of my parents? I was crying in the inside. But I don’t think anyone noticed. When Joey said, “Kelly, we understand that this is going to be hard for you, but we want you to be part of our family and this is something that you have to do. We know you might be too young to understand what I am trying to say. But hey, now you have your own sister! Here why don’t you come and sit next to Sammy.” I got up from my chair, and sat next to Sammy. I just looked at her. And she just looked at me. I said, “Hi, I’m Kelly.” She said, “Hi Kelly, I’m Samantha, Sammy for short. Guess what? I’m your new younger sister! We’re going to play together. And we’re going to go to the same school and…” I stopped her right there. “School? I’m going to go to school?” “Yes you are! You and Sammy are going to go to Stevenson School.” said Mom. I never thought that I would ever be able to go to school. I mean, I have gone to school before. But after what happened I never thought….But anyways, I was very excited about going to the same school as my new sister. I wanted to know all about her! So I started to ask her if she had something special she loved very much. She answered, “Yeah, Kelly! I have this bear. And I call it Mr. Bear! Isn’t that a nice name?” I didn’t answer. I was thinking about the bear my mom had given to me the day before I came here. I had called it Benny. Mommy had given it to me with so much love. Snap, Snap! “Kelly? What happened?” asked Dad. I said, “Nothing, I just remembered the bear my mommy had given to me the day before I had come here.” Sammy asked me again, “Kelly! What do you think of my bear’s name?” I said to her “I think that’s a very nice name.” Mom told Mr. Sheldon that she and Dad would come tomorrow to sign some of the leftover papers. They said to me and Sammy, “Let’s go kids. Come on Kelly, we’re going to show you your new home.”
Chapter 2
I was very scared. My life changed that very moment, because I thought that I would never get to see my mother again…and I would never get to know the secret of why my mother sent me here in the first place. They had a very nice dark blue colored Chevrolet. I sat in the back seat next to Sammy and wore my seat belt. I didn’t even know what happened after I sat in the car because I fell asleep the very next minute. When I woke up I saw Kelly sleeping in the bed next to mine. The room had light pink paint. There were pretty stickers up on the wall all around us. The wall was right next to mine and on top of the bed someone had placed many teddy bears of all colors. There was also a small TV across the room. Half of the room was filled with Sammy’s pictures and the other half of the room was empty. Right then, mom stepped into the room. She greeted me with a bright, “Good morning, Kelly!” I replied with an excited, “Good morning, mom! Is this also my room?” “Yes, of course. As you can see half of the room is filled with Sammy’s pictures. And now the other half will be filled with your pictures. We will capture every moment of happiness with you. And I promise there won’t be a tear in your eyes from now onwards.” I gave a warm smile. She reminded me of mommy. I was so happy now that I had gotten a chance to live with this awesome family. All of a sudden, from behind her hands she took out a camera and said, “Say cheese Kelly!” I was so surprised! She then told me to go into the bathroom and get ready, because after breakfast she was going to give me a tour of the house and take me outside
How is this story?
About the first chapter... At the beginning, the story is in past tense. Then right before the "flashback," it's changed to present tense. That makes it a lot harder to read. Also, I thought it was kind of weird that you described the flashback in such great detail, but wasn't very descriptive in the first few sentences.
Other than that, it's pretty good!
Reply:I really like this, it's not bored at all.
but in my mind I keep thinking, is this story soon gonna be about the new dad sexually assaulted the kids he adopted.
Please....I hope not. 'cause I'm really don't like that kind of story.
keep writing....
all the best for yaa.
Reply:wow! this story is great! it rocks! i no i read this before but i read it again just bcause it was that guuuudddddd!!!!! im working on mine 2! its about a grandma who owns an orphanage and tells them stories every sunday evening! 1 day she tells them her own story and at the very very end the children grow up and realize that that was the grandma's life story! its really cool!!!! ill mail it 2 u! but anywayz i love ur story. I know that the story isnt that smooth but it isnt because its in a 7 yer old point of view!!!!!
ily
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Reply:long and nice...
Reply:It's so good! I think you need to work on it a little bit to make it sound smoother. I also noticed that you wrote "I saw Kelly sleeping on the bed next to mine." isn't the story from Kelly's point of view? Well, I guess you got confused. Happens to me a lot. But other than that, it's awesome! I love it. keep writing. I really want to read the rest of the story!
Reply:it's to long to read for me!!!!!!! sorry
This was a night to remember. As usual when everyone was asleep I went outside for a walk. Creek! The wooden door needs a lot of fixing! But Dad doesn’t do anything about it! I’m just lucky enough that nobody knows I was going out. I go out for a stroll in the park and sit on the swings and just ponder. I was wondering what my real mother must be doing right now. Let me tell you everything from the beginning. I was born in Colorado. My mom and dad loved me very much. They had named me Kelly Del but one dark night, my dad got into an accident during a storm. I was only three then and it was hard for my mom to get out of this shock. So when I was about six years old my mom decided to put me into an orphanage home. She told me she was going away for a tour at work and she would come back to get me the very next day. But she never came back… I always thought that the reason she didn’t come back was because she wasn’t able to give me a normal living. But still I waited each and everyday, when their came one day, after almost one year later, that I was told I was going into a foster home. I was horrified. The family seemed nice…but then again…what better do I know? Mrs. Felon, who had been taking care of me for a year, took me into a bright room. There was Mr. Sheldon on the other side of the table, a man who was wearing a bright yellow shirt and jeans, a woman who was wearing a dark blue shirt with a brown scarf, and a girl wearing a flowered shirt and skirt who seemed almost my age. Mr. Sheldon told me to take a seat next to the woman. I sat down and Mrs. Felon sat next to me. They told me I had no other choice other then agreeing to live with the new family. But still they asked me if it was okay with me or not…I thought about what to say…I was really confused. If I didn’t have a choice then why were they making it seem like there was…I said to him “Well since you have already made the decision, what else can I say?” He said “Okay.” They all talked with each other. The man across the table told the family some information about me. Like, I was 7 years old; I’ve been living here for almost a year, my dad died when I was three and etc. The man and woman told the man “We don’t want to know anything more about her past other than her behavior. I mean, is she quiet, shy, mean, excited, etc.” The man said, “Well there is much to say about her…she is very quiet, but not shy, she is absolutely not mean! There hasn’t been anything that has lead her to become excited so I don’t think there is much to say about that. But she has been a pleasure to have around here.” He gave me a quick smile. I hadn’t ever seen him in my life. Than how did he know so much about me? I was getting a bit nervous, but then I thought that well, Mrs. Felon or someone else told him that. Than the women said, “Okay, we have made our decision! We have decided to take her into our home!” Everyone became very excited. Especially the girl! She said to the women, “Mommy! Mommy! Is she my new sister? Mommy!!?? Answer me! Is she my new sister?” Her mother said “Yes, Sammy! What do you want to name her? Do you want to name her Natalie?” I cried out “WHAT? You can’t change my name!! Mrs. Felon!! They can’t change my name right?” Mrs. Felon gave the man a look. She said “Well since you do belong to them now they can change your name!” The woman said “Honey, its okay. If you don’t want to change your name, than it’s fine with me! Now let me introduce us to you. I’m Sandy Howard, and I’m your new mother! This is my husband, you’re new father, Joey Howard, and this is Samantha Howard, your new sister.” I said sadly, “I have to change my last name?” Sandy said “Yes, you are our new daughter which means your part of our family! So now your name is Kelly Howard…now doesn’t that sound great?” I thought about it for a while. I do have to live with them now. Which means I will have to compromise something’s, even if it my name. “Okay Sandy, if that’s what you wish.” Sandy said, “Honey, you can call me mom! After all I am your mom now, right?” I said to her in a low voice “Okay, mom.” I never in my life had thought I would have to see a day like this one. How could I have let these people take the place of my parents? I was crying in the inside. But I don’t think anyone noticed. When Joey said, “Kelly, we understand that this is going to be hard for you, but we want you to be part of our family and this is something that you have to do. We know you might be too young to understand what I am trying to say. But hey, now you have your own sister! Here why don’t you come and sit next to Sammy.” I got up from my chair, and sat next to Sammy. I just looked at her. And she just looked at me. I said, “Hi, I’m Kelly.” She said, “Hi Kelly, I’m Samantha, Sammy for short. Guess what? I’m your new younger sister! We’re going to play together. And we’re going to go to the same school and…” I stopped her right there. “School? I’m going to go to school?” “Yes you are! You and Sammy are going to go to Stevenson School.” said Mom. I never thought that I would ever be able to go to school. I mean, I have gone to school before. But after what happened I never thought….But anyways, I was very excited about going to the same school as my new sister. I wanted to know all about her! So I started to ask her if she had something special she loved very much. She answered, “Yeah, Kelly! I have this bear. And I call it Mr. Bear! Isn’t that a nice name?” I didn’t answer. I was thinking about the bear my mom had given to me the day before I came here. I had called it Benny. Mommy had given it to me with so much love. Snap, Snap! “Kelly? What happened?” asked Dad. I said, “Nothing, I just remembered the bear my mommy had given to me the day before I had come here.” Sammy asked me again, “Kelly! What do you think of my bear’s name?” I said to her “I think that’s a very nice name.” Mom told Mr. Sheldon that she and Dad would come tomorrow to sign some of the leftover papers. They said to me and Sammy, “Let’s go kids. Come on Kelly, we’re going to show you your new home.”
Chapter 2
I was very scared. My life changed that very moment, because I thought that I would never get to see my mother again…and I would never get to know the secret of why my mother sent me here in the first place. They had a very nice dark blue colored Chevrolet. I sat in the back seat next to Sammy and wore my seat belt. I didn’t even know what happened after I sat in the car because I fell asleep the very next minute. When I woke up I saw Kelly sleeping in the bed next to mine. The room had light pink paint. There were pretty stickers up on the wall all around us. The wall was right next to mine and on top of the bed someone had placed many teddy bears of all colors. There was also a small TV across the room. Half of the room was filled with Sammy’s pictures and the other half of the room was empty. Right then, mom stepped into the room. She greeted me with a bright, “Good morning, Kelly!” I replied with an excited, “Good morning, mom! Is this also my room?” “Yes, of course. As you can see half of the room is filled with Sammy’s pictures. And now the other half will be filled with your pictures. We will capture every moment of happiness with you. And I promise there won’t be a tear in your eyes from now onwards.” I gave a warm smile. She reminded me of mommy. I was so happy now that I had gotten a chance to live with this awesome family. All of a sudden, from behind her hands she took out a camera and said, “Say cheese Kelly!” I was so surprised! She then told me to go into the bathroom and get ready, because after breakfast she was going to give me a tour of the house and take me outside
How is this story?
About the first chapter... At the beginning, the story is in past tense. Then right before the "flashback," it's changed to present tense. That makes it a lot harder to read. Also, I thought it was kind of weird that you described the flashback in such great detail, but wasn't very descriptive in the first few sentences.
Other than that, it's pretty good!
Reply:I really like this, it's not bored at all.
but in my mind I keep thinking, is this story soon gonna be about the new dad sexually assaulted the kids he adopted.
Please....I hope not. 'cause I'm really don't like that kind of story.
keep writing....
all the best for yaa.
Reply:wow! this story is great! it rocks! i no i read this before but i read it again just bcause it was that guuuudddddd!!!!! im working on mine 2! its about a grandma who owns an orphanage and tells them stories every sunday evening! 1 day she tells them her own story and at the very very end the children grow up and realize that that was the grandma's life story! its really cool!!!! ill mail it 2 u! but anywayz i love ur story. I know that the story isnt that smooth but it isnt because its in a 7 yer old point of view!!!!!
ily
bye
Reply:long and nice...
Reply:It's so good! I think you need to work on it a little bit to make it sound smoother. I also noticed that you wrote "I saw Kelly sleeping on the bed next to mine." isn't the story from Kelly's point of view? Well, I guess you got confused. Happens to me a lot. But other than that, it's awesome! I love it. keep writing. I really want to read the rest of the story!
Reply:it's to long to read for me!!!!!!! sorry
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What are grandparents...?
WHAT IS A GRANDPARENT?
(taken from papers written by a class of 8-year-olds)
Grandparents are a lady and a man who have no little children of her own. They like other people's.
A grandfather is a man %26amp; a grandmother is a lady!
Grandparents don't have to do anything except be
there when we come to see them. They are so old
they shouldn't play hard or run.
It is good if they drive us to the shops and give us money.
When they take us for walks, they slow down past things like pretty leaves and caterpillars.
They show us and talk to us about the color of the flowers and also why we shouldn't step on "cracks."
They don't say, "Hurry up."
Usually grandmothers are fat but not too fat to tie your shoes.
They wear glasses and funny underwear.
They can take their teeth and gums out.
Grandparents don't have to be smart.
They have to answer questions like "why isn't God
married?" and "How come dogs chase cats?".
When they read to us, they don't skip. They don't mind if we ask for the same story over again.
Everybody should try to have a grandmother, especially if you don't have television because they are the only grown ups who like to spend time with us.
They know we should have snack-time before bedtime and they say prayers with us every time and kiss us even when we've acted bad.
A 6 year old was asked where his grandma lived. "Oh," he said, "she lives at the airport and when we want her we just go get her. Then when we're done having her visit, we take her back to the airport."
Grandpa is the smartest man on earth! He teaches me good things but I don't get to see him enough to get as smart as him!
It's funny when they bend over, you hear gas leaks and they blame their dog."
What are grandparents...?
That's cute! I just became a granmother 3 weeks ago! I'm only 43 though!
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(taken from papers written by a class of 8-year-olds)
Grandparents are a lady and a man who have no little children of her own. They like other people's.
A grandfather is a man %26amp; a grandmother is a lady!
Grandparents don't have to do anything except be
there when we come to see them. They are so old
they shouldn't play hard or run.
It is good if they drive us to the shops and give us money.
When they take us for walks, they slow down past things like pretty leaves and caterpillars.
They show us and talk to us about the color of the flowers and also why we shouldn't step on "cracks."
They don't say, "Hurry up."
Usually grandmothers are fat but not too fat to tie your shoes.
They wear glasses and funny underwear.
They can take their teeth and gums out.
Grandparents don't have to be smart.
They have to answer questions like "why isn't God
married?" and "How come dogs chase cats?".
When they read to us, they don't skip. They don't mind if we ask for the same story over again.
Everybody should try to have a grandmother, especially if you don't have television because they are the only grown ups who like to spend time with us.
They know we should have snack-time before bedtime and they say prayers with us every time and kiss us even when we've acted bad.
A 6 year old was asked where his grandma lived. "Oh," he said, "she lives at the airport and when we want her we just go get her. Then when we're done having her visit, we take her back to the airport."
Grandpa is the smartest man on earth! He teaches me good things but I don't get to see him enough to get as smart as him!
It's funny when they bend over, you hear gas leaks and they blame their dog."
What are grandparents...?
That's cute! I just became a granmother 3 weeks ago! I'm only 43 though!
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