How is this poem..................?

please read it and tell what you think and how to improve it.............



A stream flows from the writer's mind

through pen unto his paper

thoughts pass steady as morning light

through obstructing branches

for something lost

hidden deep down in murkiness

he searches the heavenly clouds

and the deepest oceans

the exotic wilderness of the human mind

lush, rich and evergreen throughout winter



Beneath the bushes he scours,

to find many missing songs

the cloud rains its words

heart is drawn in letters

shakes, the tree, of its green and dying leaves

mountains turned to reveal its unpleasant side

but a perfumy scent marks an uplifting taste

he rids of his piercing thorns

and hundreds of blossoming flowers



Its feelings pour unto the paper,

washing it of its emptiness

All that was hidden has unveiled itself

paper drinks elixir from the writer's heart

Writer's soul manifests itself on a piece of paper

reincarnated, it lives

A dull paper is now the writer,

Fallen rose finally blooms

in a new horizon's sun

melting the ice,

heart emptied out

he hangs himself and dies.

How is this poem..................?
Hey, its nice.
Reply:Through obstructing branches, light flopping away in gems, for something lost like ripples
Reply:Beautiful poem. Keep it as it is. Try submitting it to a contest or, if you're in College, for scholarship money. That could win!
Reply:i'm also intreasted in poems and make it.i make comedy poems more then serious1.but by reading that poem i'm thinking that the written poem is not made by u cuz i'v read this poem in my skool.
Reply:It's great.